这是很多大学生在申请美国大学转学时会遇到的第一道难题。

今天我们就手把手教大家写一篇转学文书（TRANSFER ESSAY）。

写转学文书的7个步骤

表明你的核心价值观

解释当初你为什么选择这所学校（即将离开的学校）

说明你想转学的具体原因

Key points & Samples

这样场景化的表述，是不是比直接说“the values that are important to me are connection, intimacy, family, and listening.”要更好？

在具体的描述中，要学会用“简单直述+讲故事”的方法。

例如上面案例中，“Slowly…my Dad’s stories about his patient with Atherosclerosis.”就是运用了讲故事的方法，而“Listening is how we take care of one another”则是直接表述。

例子2：阐述父母对自己的影响，以及我想做什么事情。

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例子1：“我的经历造就了我”型的结尾

Before I could even walk, my parents instilled in me a love for history. And thanks to their passion for travel, much of my early education was experiential. At eight, I could not only recite knowledge of Corrie Ten Boom, I'd visited the house where she'd hidden Jews in her home during WWII. By 10 I’d seen the Roman Ruins just outside Paris and by 11, I’d visited Rome and Florence, and begun to develop a passion for Michelangelo. By 14 I’d climbed the caverns of Mykonos and by 16 I’d walked barefoot through India and jogged along the Great Wall of China.

Though moving around wasn’t always easy, travel gave me the opportunity to become more adaptable and resourceful, and I came to embrace differences as not only normal but exciting. My passion for cultural experiences and history continued in high school, and I looked forward to more experiential learning opportunities in college.Though moving around wasn’t always easy, travel gave me the opportunity to become more adaptable and resourceful, and I came to embrace differences as not only normal but exciting. My passion for cultural experiences and history continued in high school, and I looked forward to more experiential learning opportunities in college.

解析

One of the things that initially attracted me to Biola University was the Torrey Honors program. I also appreciated the welcoming attitude of its students, and, initially, its emphasis on Judeo-Christian values. But the past year and a half has given me time for introspection, and I have begun to see that Biola and I are not the best match.

解析

I believe, for example, in the freedom to express love for whomever one chooses. But on at least one occasion at Biola I’ve been reported to my resident director for displaying physical affection toward another girl and have been told I could risk expulsion if we were “caught” in the act. I also believe that one should be free to express her spiritual beliefs in any way she chooses. At Biola, however, students are required to attend a minimum of 30 chapel events, and must pay upwards of $300 if this requirement is not met. I’m also interested in a diversity of perspective, but faculty are required to teach through a Biblical lens, and over 90% of the students in my department (Anthropology) are seeking to do missionary work following graduation. Finally, I didn’t feel the Torrey Honors Program provided the kind of experiential learning environment I was looking for.

解析

Two highlights of my time at Biola included debate, and the experience of founding BQU, a safe, but underground group for queer students. Working with the debate team has taught me how to be accountable for my own work and more humble in my losses. Working with BQU has shown me not only the necessity of being vulnerable with others, but has also taught me skills in creating a group constitution, designing a website, and advertising our cause in a non-inflammatory way.

讲述完自己对学校的“不满”，当然要讲一些自己在这个学校的高光时刻和收获，否则容易让人觉得只是在单纯地抱怨和责怪学校。

I’ve always been interested in psychological or environmental root of motives, and I see myself one day working in public policy. I’m seeking science and social science departments that offer both excellent research facilities and opportunities for practical application.

紧接着上面的内容，作者顺势讲自己想做什么，也即自己的梦想是什么——希望有一天能“working in public policy”。

I am interested in the debate team at Fordham because its Jesuit tradition inspires an intellectually rigorous environment. While my current team is very skilled, it does not fulfill my intellectual values; I want classmates who want to explore controversial topics despite their personal stances, and who want to take debate as seriously as their social lives. My desire to explore diversity is also reflected in my major (Anthropology), and draws me to the Irish Studies department. I am personally looking to revive my cultural heritage, and I am also interested in helping oppressed cultures thrive. I see a need to promote how Celtic culture shaped current American society, and want to explore the gender roles of early Celtic culture.

作者在这一段以自己对 Fordham University 的辩论队感兴趣以及为什么感兴趣为引子，阐述自己希望如何解决当前的“困境”（暗示 Fordham University 有她想要的东西，而且能为她提供帮助/环境/氛围）。

Although my time at Biola has been challenging, it has given me time to discover my own values, ethics, and priorities. I am ready to find a place where I can feel at home, and Fordham is a place where I can picture myself reading Nietzsche in my dorm room or working on progressive debate resolutions with the squad. I hope to contribute my interests and values to the Fordham tradition.

俗话说“想要什么就得大声说出来（反正也不一定能得到）”。虽然作者在上一段中暗示了学校，但是还没有“捅破最后一层纸”，所以作者在最后一段直奔主题，明确告诉 Fordham University 的招生官——“I am ready to find a place where I can feel at home”，并且我（指作者）觉得Fordham University 是一个不错的选择（and Fordham is a place where…）。